Tuesday, May 09, 2006

May


A sky of moss coats lips and
broken breaths and
engines groan before such

traffic lights: the irises
of felines.

The thorny tongues we all so feared
have spread:

forget the key. We’ll thunder through
them hand in hand until we see the
bridge and maybe

I will freeze-frame that
wave again and

beg you
to forgive.


Copyright © 2006 Anna Piutti

29 comments:

Lorena said...

your poetry is so deep. it's the kind of poem that i have to read over and over again to understand.
the language is so magical.

lovely.
(worth waiting for :)

Anna Piutti said...

Thank you, Lorena :)

MB said...

Your very original imagery lends the poem such power.

Anna Piutti said...

Thank you so much, Moose! :)

Maddy said...

gorgeous layers

beg you to forgive...

Anna Piutti said...

Thank you, Maddy.

Luanne said...

i echo mb. your imagery is very original. wonderful, as always!

Anna Piutti said...

Thank you Luanne :).

golfedombre said...

purtroppo il mio inglese non è sufficiente per capire come dovrei.

sarà un motivo in più per impararlo.

ciao

Anna Piutti said...

:)

Endment said...

Thank you for sharing this poem

Anna Piutti said...

You're welcome.

jadedprimadonna said...

Gave me cold chills - I love it!

Anna Piutti said...

Hello there, jaded!
Thank you for stopping by; I'm glad you liked my poem.

Travis Jay Morgan said...

The flow at the begining made me blink and reread. What about - a comma after moss, Period after breaths. And newline at Engines. like so:

A sky of moss, coats lips and
broken breaths.
Engines groan before such
traffic lights: eyes feline
indeed.

Just some thoughts...as I stumbled there in the begining. Best Regards.

Anna Piutti said...

Travis, I appreciate your suggestion.

However, the flow at the beginning was created exactly for the purpose of making readers "blink", and I would not put a comma between a subject and a verb.

Thank you for stopping by, and
best regards to you.

Perfect Virgo said...

Considering English is not your first language your command of grammar and punctuation is all the more impressive.

Glad you enjoyed "The Upper Room." Somewhat poppier than my usual fare! Let's say summery and optimistic.

Anna Piutti said...

Virgo -- thank you so much.
Considering this text's (intentional) ambiguity, especially as far as the first stanza's concerned, I'm sure many people wouldn't agree with you. So, once again, thank you :).

My musical tastes are extremely eclectic. I listen to a bit of everything, really.

Travis Jay Morgan said...

hehe, as expected.

Sue hardy-Dawson said...

some really though prevoking poems, didn't have time to post last time, children exploded everywhere into world war three-over clothes borrowed or some such majour importance-so I came back today

Anna Piutti said...

:) Thank you, Sue!

jadedprimadonna said...

Must agree with Virgo - your command of English is unbelievable. Beautiful poem with beautiful imagery!

jadedprimadonna said...

Must agree with Virgo - your command of English is unbelievable. Beautiful poem with beautiful imagery!

Anna Piutti said...

Jaded - Thank you SO much!

Clownscape said...

your poems just went in through me and melted.... trying to recollect.... smile.

Anna Piutti said...

Thank you, Clown! :)

The Clown said...

This is just to let you know that I've added you to my favorite listings on my blogspot blogs. Also, I've taken the freedom of quoting some of your lines from this blog there to go with your link. If you're dissatisfied with the quote you may suggest something better. I'd be very happy to have your approval or choice for the quote. Thank you.
A Dance in Silent Violins
FRENZY

Anna Piutti said...

Hey Clown,

thank you for adding me to your favorite blogspot links; I'm honored.
As far as the quote, it's ok with me...I might want to revise its punctuation (if and when I do I'll let you know), but for now I think it could do.
Thanks :).

GEL said...

I'm enjoying reading your past poems until you post afresh.
I read this aloud a few times. I'm very taken with it.
Ironically, I recalled that James Joyce is one of your favorite authors. I read him in high school, but since that was a while ago, I've wanted to reread him. Someone else in our book group chose "The Dead" as this months read. Today, we'll be discussing that story along with a costume/holiday lunch.